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I think birth order can make a difference in their personality but it\'s not absolute.
Because usually, the first child has a sense of responsibility more than other children, in this case, birth order can affect their personality.
However, some children who were born at first don\'t act like that.
So I think of course birth order can affect their personality but growth environment affect more than birth oreder.
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Well done, [이름]! I hope you continue to practice expressing yourself through writing.-Faith-
I think birth order can make a difference in their personality but it\'s not absolute.>> I think birth order can make a difference in one\'s personality but it\'s not absolute.
Because usually, the first child has a sense of responsibility more than other children, in this case, birth order can affect their personality.
Because usually, the first child has a sense of responsibility more than other children, in this case, birth order can affect their personality.
>> Because usually, the first child has a sense of responsibility more than his/her siblings, in this case, birth order can affect their personality.
However, some children who were born at first don\'t act like that.
However, some children who were born at first don\'t act like that.
>> However, some children who were born first don\'t act like that.
So I think of course birth order can affect their personality but growth environment affect more than birth oreder.
So I think of course birth order can affect their personality but growth environment affect more than birth oreder.
>> So I think, of course, birth order can affect their personality but growth environment affects more than the birth order.
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