teacher~
학생이 쓴 원문
Good morning, teacher!
It is still very hot in our place, and i can hear cicadas everyday
Now i am in vacation, so i rest, sleep, eat everyday
In consequence i gained weight
I hate it! i want to taller, but not want to gain weight
Actully i ate too much these day
I ate fast food like noodle, hamburger, chiken, pizza
OMG, now i gained weight
I will make my diet diary so i can slim down again
Do you want to hear about my diet project?
First, i will go to teakwondo every day
Second, i will eat fewer, i won't eat fast food again
Third, i will jumprope every wednesday
with this plan my weight going to return back
but i have tiny problem i want to grow taller, but if i eat fewer i can't be taller
What should i do?
Maybe i have to eat alot i can diet when i get taller
I will stop from here~
PS. in korea it is very important to slim down when people saw fat people
they say " go on a diet " also, when i watch tv entertainers are all slim
in your country is it important to slim down?
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! Being slim is a trend. Your observation is true. Most TV personalities are slim. But, you should think that you go on a diet for your health it is not because others tell you to be slim. Health is wealth so, take good care of your health. Anyway, I will talk with you again later in our class.
~Teacher Chloe
Good morning, teacher!
>>Correct!It is still very hot in our place, and i can hear cicadas everyday
>>It is still very hot in our place and I still can hear the cicadas everyday.Now i am in vacation, so i rest, sleep, eat everyday
>>I am still on vacation so, I rest, sleep, and eat everyday.In consequence i gained weight
>>As a result, I gained weight. I hate it! i want to taller, but not want to gain weight
>>I hate it because all I want is to get taller not to gain weight. Actully i ate too much these day
>>Actually, I eat too much these days. I ate fast food like noodle, hamburger, chiken, pizza
>>I eat fast food such as noodles, hamburgers, chicken and pizza. OMG, now i gained weight
>>Now, I gained some weight. I will make my diet diary so i can slim down again
>>I will make a diet diary so, I would lose weight. Do you want to hear about my diet project?
>>Correct! First, i will go to teakwondo every day
>>First, I will go to my taekwondo class everyday.Second, i will eat fewer, i won\'t eat fast food again
>>Second, I will eat less fast food.
OR:>>Second, I will lessen my fast food intake. Third, i will jumprope every wednesday
>>Third, I will do jumprope every Wednesday.with this plan my weight going to return back
>>With my plan, I will lose weight in no time. but i have tiny problem i want to grow taller, but if i eat fewer i can\'t be taller
>>But, I have a problem. How can I grow taller if I will eat less?
What should i do?
>>What should I do? Maybe i have to eat alot i can diet when i get taller
>>Maybe, I will have to eat grow food. I will stop from here~
>>I will stop from here. PS. in korea it is very important to slim down when people saw fat people they say \" go on a diet \" also, when i watch tv entertainers are all slim
>>In Korea, it is very important to be slim becaise when they see you fat, people would ask you go on a diet. Most TV pesonalities are slim. in your country is it important to slim down?
>>Is it the same in your country?
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