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2016-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good morning, teacher! It is still very hot in our place, and i can hear cicadas everyday Now i am in vacation, so i rest, sleep, eat everyday In consequence i gained weight I hate it! i want to taller, but not want to gain weight Actully i ate too much these day I ate fast food like noodle, hamburger, chiken, pizza OMG, now i gained weight I will make my diet diary so i can slim down again Do you want to hear about my diet project? First, i will go to teakwondo every day Second, i will eat fewer, i won't eat fast food again Third, i will jumprope every wednesday with this plan my weight going to return back but i have tiny problem i want to grow taller, but if i eat fewer i can't be taller What should i do? Maybe i have to eat alot i can diet when i get taller I will stop from here~ PS. in korea it is very important to slim down when people saw fat people they say " go on a diet " also, when i watch tv entertainers are all slim in your country is it important to slim down?

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Hello, [이름]! Being slim is a trend. Your observation is true. Most TV personalities are slim. But, you should think that you go on a diet for your health it is not because others tell you to be slim. Health is wealth so, take good care of your health. Anyway, I will talk with you again later in our class.  ~Teacher Chloe   Good morning, teacher! >>Correct!It is still very hot in our place, and i can hear cicadas everyday >>It is still very hot in our place and I still can hear the cicadas everyday.Now i am in vacation, so i rest, sleep, eat everyday >>I am still on vacation so, I rest, sleep, and eat everyday.In consequence i gained weight >>As a result, I gained weight. I hate it! i want to taller, but not want to gain weight >>I hate it because all I want is to get taller not to gain weight. Actully i ate too much these day >>Actually, I eat too much these days. I ate fast food like noodle, hamburger, chiken, pizza >>I eat fast food such as noodles, hamburgers, chicken and pizza. OMG, now i gained weight >>Now, I gained some weight. I will make my diet diary so i can slim down again >>I will make a diet diary so, I would lose weight. Do you want to hear about my diet project? >>Correct! First, i will go to teakwondo every day >>First, I will go to my taekwondo class everyday.Second, i will eat fewer, i won\'t eat fast food again >>Second, I will eat less fast food. OR:>>Second, I will lessen my fast food intake. Third, i will jumprope every wednesday >>Third, I will do jumprope every Wednesday.with this plan my weight going to return back >>With my plan, I will lose weight in no time. but i have tiny problem i want to grow taller, but if i eat fewer i can\'t be taller >>But, I have a problem. How can I grow taller if I will eat less? What should i do? >>What should I do? Maybe i have to eat alot i can diet when i get taller >>Maybe, I will have to eat grow food. I will stop from here~ >>I will stop from here. PS. in korea it is very important to slim down when people saw fat people they say \" go on a diet \" also, when i watch tv entertainers are all slim >>In Korea, it is very important to be slim becaise when they see you fat, people would ask you go on a diet. Most TV pesonalities are slim. in your country is it important to slim down? >>Is it the same in your country?

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