teacher Chloe
학생이 쓴 원문
Good morning, teacher!
Today,i fought with my brother, He is really annoying me
I don't know why he behavior like that.
do you want to hear about my brother?
My brother is 12years old, he is smart and good at sport
His favorite sport is soccer. he play sport with relative every weekend
He also like dodgeball
Every week day he goes to school because he is participating in dodgeball competiton
He is best brother when other people see
But, he doesn't listen to me.
When he goes to supermarket with my mom, he doesn't buy anything for me
If my mom says "buy something for your sister"
He buy not tasty food.
It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight.
More over he also make fun of me every time
But when i make fun of him, he cries
then my parents punished me
He is evil, I saw his smile when he cry
His not always like that he sometime listen to me very well
I hopes my little brother would listen to me everytime
I will stop frome here
ps. do you have any brother or sister
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! Have a wide patience for your brother. It is okay. Isn\'t he cute? I find him cute. (Hahaha) When he teases you, it only means that he misses you. He wants your attention. So, always be an understanding sister to your brother. You can do it! Just love him. He is still young so, just let him play. In time, he will mature. I think you can\'t wait for that time. Oh, yes! I have an elder sister and an elder brother. I am the youngest. I understand your brother because he is the youngest, too. (Hahaha) So, just relax.
~Teacher Chloe
Good morning, teacher!
>>Correct! Today,i fought with my brother, He is really annoying me
>>Today, I fought with my brother. He really annoys me. I don\'t know why he behavior like that.
>>I don\'t know why he behaves like that.
OR:>>I don\'t understand his behavior. do you want to hear about my brother?
>>Correct! My brother is 12years old, he is smart and good at sport
>>He is 12 years old. He is smart and good at sports. His favorite sport is soccer.
>>Correct!
he play sport with relative every weekend>>He plays sports with our relatives every weekend.
He also like dodgeball
>>He also likes playing dodgeball. Every week day he goes to school because he is participating in dodgeball competiton>>At school, he participates in dodgeball games.
He is best brother when other people see
>>To others, he may be the best brother. But, he doesn\'t listen to me.
>>Correct!When he goes to supermarket with my mom, he doesn\'t buy anything for me
>>When he goes to the supermarket with my mom, he doesn\'t buy anything for me.
If my mom says \"buy something for your sister\" He buy not tasty food.
>>When my mom asked him to buy something for me, he buys me not tasty food.
OR:>>When my mom asked him to buy something for me, he buys me bland food. It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight.
>>Such of his behavoir brings us into a fight. More over he also make fun of me every time
>>Moreover, he makes fun of me every time. But when i make fun of him, he cries
>>When I make fun of him, he cries. then my parents punished me
>>When he does, my parents punish me. He is evil, I saw his smile when he cry
>>He is evil. I see his smile when he cries. His not always like that he sometime listen to me very well
>>He sometimes listen to me. I hopes my little brother would listen to me everytime
>>I hope that would listen to me every time. I will stop frome here
>>I will stop from here. ps. do you have any brother or sister
>>Do you any brother or sister?
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