Tech
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I think technology changed our life. And then, they are important. From ancient times to present times,technology has advanced human. Thanks to technology, humans can live comfortable. Many people try to improve technology for next generation. They will live in a planet polluted by global warming, So, for them, we should improve our technology. And we should to take action to stop global warming.
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I think technology changed our life. And then, they are important.
>> I believe that technology has changed our lives. And they become significant.
From ancient times to present times,technology has advanced human.
>> Technology has advanced humanity from ancient times to the present.
Thanks to technology, humans can live comfortable.
>> Humans can live comfortably today thanks to technology.
Many people try to improve technology for next generation.
>> Correct!
They will live in a planet polluted by global warming, So, for them, we should improve our technology.
>> We should advance our technology for them because they will live on a planet that has been polluted by global warming.
And we should to take action to stop global warming.
>> To stop global warming, we should also take action.
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