technology change
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Today,i`m going to talk about technology change.
There are many technology that have develop but i will explicate phone.
When 2013,the reason that people use phone is to search for information or communicate with friends.But, these days using of phone is make a ppt or make game.Also, the appearance of phone is develop.
Phone is become thinner .
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Today,i`m going to talk about technology change.
>>> Today, I`m going to talk about how technology changed.
There are many technology that have develop but i will explicate phone.
>>> There is much technology that has developed but I will explicate the phone.
When 2013,the reason that people use phone is to search for information or communicate with friends.
>>> In 2013, the reason that people use phones is to search for information or communicate with friends.
But, these days using of phone is make a ppt or make game.
>>> But, these days we can use the phones to make a ppt or games.
Also, the appearance of phone is develop.
>>> Also, the appearance of the phone is developed.
Phone is become thinner .
>>> Phones become thinner.
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