technology has many great benefits as well as very dangerous consequences?
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I agree that the technology has many great benefits as well as very dangerous consequences.
For example, the smartphone has invented to communicate more conveniently. However, this invention makes our life drier. We are not communicating with people face to face. Even we met our friends or lover we do not see each others. All the people concentrate on the smartphone. Even if we are not talking directly but through Kakaotalk. That is the saddest disadvantage of the technology. Also, the invention of all the digital devices such as the computer, smartphone etc, our body conditions is getting worse. Our eyes are getting worse, and we suffered from the turtle neck syndrome.
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Hi, dear [이름]! (^^,)
Thank you for once again writing in our composition board. ^^I feel fine today. The weather in the Philippines is really good.
How about you? How are you doing today? I hope the weather out there is not affecting your mood that much.
You were right when you said technological advancement has brought people farther apart rather than bringing them together.
I guess technology has made everything more convenient for us.
Unfortunately, so does relationships and bondings.
Relationships could start with just a click of a finger, and apparently could easily end in the same manner.
Nowadays, it\'s easy to neglect our families and friends. It\'s a sad reality.
Relationships are built in close connection and sharing of emotions but nowadays, instead of seeing our loved ones face-to-face, we prefer to talk to them over the phone, through email or video chat.
While it is true that video chat could show the facial expressions of the person you are talking to, he or she cannot give you the comfort that you need. Nothing beats the power of a healing touch to a wounded soul.
Technology, in a way, has indeed made our everyday tasks easier but it\'s also because of technology why weapons of mass destruction and some diseases have arised.
Thank you for a very good feedback [이름]. I\'m hoping to see more of your compositions. I hope you have a wonderful day. Stay safe and God bless!
~Teacher Charry ^^
I agree that the technology has many great benefits as well as very dangerous consequences.
>> I agree that technology has many great benefits as well as very dangerous consequences.
For example, the smartphone has invented to communicate more conveniently.
>> For example, the smartphone was invented so we could communicate more conveniently.
However, this invention makes our life drier.
>> However, this invention has made our lives less productive.
We are not communicating with people face to face.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We don\'t communicate with other people face to face anymore.
Even we met our friends or lover we do not see each others.
>> Even when we meet our friends or see our special someone, we don\'t give our full attention to them.
All the people concentrate on the smartphone.
>> All the people concentrate on their smartphones.
Even if we are not talking directly but through Kakaotalk.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: We only communicate through Kakaotalk.
That is the saddest disadvantage of the technology.
>> That is the saddest disadvantage of technology.
Also, the invention of all the digital devices such as the computer, smartphone etc, our body conditions is getting worse.
>> Also, with the invention of all the digital devices such as the computer, smartphone etc, our body conditions are also affected.
Our eyes are getting worse, and we suffered from the turtle neck syndrome.
>> Our eyes are damaged, and we also suffer from the turtle neck syndrome.
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