teenagers' cell phone use.
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There are some reasons why a teenager shouldn't have a cell phone.
As you know , Cell phones are like computers in these days.
A cutting edge tech is being applied to the cell phone.
Users can access to the internet and play a game with their cell
phone.
Most of teenagers are student. and they should concentrate on a study.
Much cell phone uses would make them to waste their valuable time.
Some of them might access to the harmful sites.
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There are some reasons why a teenager shouldn't have a cell phone.>>correct!
As you know , Cell phones are like computers in these days.
>>correct!
A cutting edge tech is being applied to the cell phone.
>>correct!
Users can access to the internet and play a game with their cell
phone.
>>correct!
Most of teenagers are student. and they should concentrate on a study.
>>Most teenagers are students, and that, they should focus on their studies.
Much cell phone uses would make them to waste their valuable time.
>>correct!
Some of them might access to the harmful sites.
>.correct!
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