Tell about something you wish had never happened.

2015-09-15 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I wish that my family would never get sick or suffer from illness, although it is highly unlikely. As people get older, our immune system won’t operate as well as before and will be getting weakened, so we will become vulnerable to infections or diseases. Everybody wishes to live long and a healthy life. It doesn’t matter how wealthy you are. If you lose your health, you will lose everything. So health is the primary goal for all the people especially if you are over 40 or 50. When you are young and healthy, you often do not value it. However, once you experience being hospitalized, you will cherish being healthy. Another thing that I wish had never happened is having confrontations or conflicts with my family and colleagues. When serious disputes happen between friends or family, they can lead to destroying the relationship and recovering it would be very difficult. When you hurt someone’s feeling or you get hurt, it would last long. Relationships with others mean a lot.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Sir [이름]!

Happy Tuesday!
Another day of learning.

And I can say that your insights about this matter is greatly appreciated.

I hope that your family will always be healthy.

And that problems/ difficulties will be easier to deal with.

Have a great night.
Teacher Nina


I wish that my family would never get sick or suffer from illness, although it is highly unlikely.

>> correct

As people get older, our immune system won’t operate as well as before and will be getting weakened, so we will become vulnerable to infections or diseases.

>> As people get older, our immune system won\'t be work like it used to before and will be weaker, so we will become vulnerable to infections or diseases.

Everybody wishes to live long and a healthy life.

>> correct

It doesn’t matter how wealthy you are.

>> correct

If you lose your health, you will lose everything.

>> correct

So health is the primary goal for all the people especially if you are over 40 or 50.

>> So health is the primary goal of people especially if you are over 40 or 50 years old.

When you are young and healthy, you often do not value it.

>> correct

However, once you experience being hospitalized, you will cherish being healthy.

>> correct

Another thing that I wish had never happened is having confrontations or conflicts with my family and colleagues.

>> correct

When serious disputes happen between friends or family, they can lead to destroying the relationship and recovering it would be very difficult.

>> When serious disputes happen between friends or family, they can lead to destroyed relationship and recovering it would be very difficult.

>> OR: When serious disputes happen between friends or family, it might lead to broken relationships and recovering it would be very difficult.

When you hurt someone’s feeling or you get hurt, it would last long.

>> correct

Relationships with others mean a lot.

>> correct

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