Tell about something you wish had never happened.
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I wish it had never happened that I had to serve the military. If I couldn't help it, I should have chosen to do it for a short period of time. The fact that I served as an officer rank made me do the service for more than twice amount of time than those who choose to do it as a soldier rank. Moreover, ordinary Korean men serve in the ranks while taking a time off from college, meaning that they have a place to come back after finishing it. But, it wasn't the case for me. I had to be engaged in the world in the most unprepared way because there wasn't a place for me to come back after the military service. I wish I had a chance to serve the military in a way that gives me a relevant professional experience to help me find a decent job after being done with it. I wish I'd be more informed of what the consequence of the particular choice I made would be to better understand what will happen next. Then, I wouldn't be under much pressure to be employed to get a sense of belonging.
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I wish it had never happened that I had to serve the military.
>>I wish I had not served in the military.
If I couldn\'t help it, I should have chosen to do it for a short period of time.
>>correct
>>I should have chosen to do it for a short period of time if I had a choice.
The fact that I served as an officer rank made me do the service for more than twice amount of time than those who choose to do it as a soldier rank.
>>The fact that I was one of the officers, I have to do a lot of things twice than those who choose to be regular soldiers.
>>The fact that I was one of the officers, I have to do a lot of things twice than those who have lower ranks.
Moreover, ordinary Korean men serve in the ranks while taking a time off from college, meaning that they have a place to come back after finishing it.
>>Moreover, ordinary Korean men serve in the military while taking a time off from college, meaning they still have a place to go back to.
But, it wasn\'t the case for me.
>>correct
I had to be engaged in the world in the most unprepared way because there wasn\'t a place for me to come back after the military service.
>>correct
I wish I had a chance to serve the military in a way that gives me a relevant professional experience to help me find a decent job after being done with it.
>>correct
I wish I\'d be more informed of what the consequence of the particular choice I made would be to better understand what will happen next.
>>I wish I was informed of the consequences of my choices so as to understand what will happen next.
Then, I wouldn\'t be under much pressure to be employed to get a sense of belonging.
>>correct
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