Tell me about a famous Korean story.
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
Thanks for sharing this story.
It is a very good one. Well, we can learn something from it. ^_^
Anyway, [이름]. Please be careful about capitalizing your pronouns (he, she, they).
If it is not in the beginning of the sentence, then you should capitalize it.
Please check on that. See you tomorrow!
~T. Jessie~
I choosed the story of Heungbu and Nolbu.
>> Correct!
Heungbu and Nolbu were a brothers.
>> Heungbu and Nolbu are brothers.
but they were a very diffierent, espacially personality.
>> But they are very different, especially their personalities.
Nolbu is so greedy and selfish.
>> Correct!
On the other hand, Heungbu is very kind.
>> Correct!
So He loved Nolbu though Nolbu tormented him.
>> So he loved Nolbu though he tormented him.
And Nolbu is very rich but Heungbu isn\'t.
>> Correct!
One day Heungbu saw the swallow and saved that by snake.
>> One day Heungbu saw a swallow and saved it from a snake.
As time goes by The spring came, the swallow back with seed.
>> As time goes by, spring came, the swallow came back with a seed.
So Heungbu plant seed and get the fruits.
>> So Heungbu planted the seed and gathered the fruits.
But when He open the fruits, there are a lot of treasure!
>> But when he opened the fruits, there are a lot of treasure!
Therefore Heungbu bacome a rich!!
>> Therefore Heungbu bacome rich!!
Greedy Nolbu decided to save swallow too since He saw all of the Heungbu\'s story.
>> The greedy Nolbu decided to save a swallow too since he heard all of Heungbu\'s story.
But the impatient Nolbu break swallow\'s leg and cure him....
>> But the impatient Nolbu broke the swallow\'s leg and cured him....
Stories behind was same but the outcome wasn\'t same.
>> Stories behind was the same but the outcome wasn\'t the same.
Nolbu received purnish and was robbed of all of his money.
>> Nolbu was punished and all of his money was robbed.
So He became poor.
>> So he became poor.
Um....telling a story was very difficult....haha.
>> Telling a story is very difficult....haha
Anyway I hope you read interesting. *^^*
>> Anyway, I hope you enjoy reading.
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