Tell Me About a Time You Demonstrated Leadership Skills.

2022-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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In my previous experience as a customer services associate, I took a leading role in increasing the subscription rate of the Japanese market. Due to decreasing subscription level, the company formed a committee to resolve. Since the customer service associates interact with subscribers, I took the leading role. Throughout the customer interaction, I learned that many clients unsubscribe without understanding the full subscription service. For instance, many customers were unaware that they could enjoy both English and Japanese articles through one subscription. When I brought up the necessity of advertisement, many team members were hesitant due to the cost. Therefore, I did a brief cost and benefit analysis and presented in front of members to win approval from team members, which led to an increase in subscription level. Throughout the experience, I learned that influence is the critical component of leadership in convincing others with logical, emotional, and cooperative appeals.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for this Aciel!

In my previous experience as a customer services associate, I took a leading role in increasing the subscription rate of the Japanese market. 
>>>  correct 
Due to decreasing subscription level, the company formed a committee to resolve. 
>>> Due to decreasing subscription level, the company formed a committee to resolve it.  
>>> OR: Due to decreasing subscription level, the company formed a committee to work on it.  
Since the customer service associates interact with subscribers, I took the leading role. 
>>>  correct  
Throughout the customer interaction, I learned that many clients unsubscribe without understanding the full subscription service. 
>>>  correct   
For instance, many customers were unaware that they could enjoy both English and Japanese articles through one subscription. 
>>> correct    
When I brought up the necessity of advertisement, many team members were hesitant due to the cost. 
>>> correct    
Therefore, I did a brief cost and benefit analysis and presented in front of members to win approval from team members, which led to an increase in subscription level. 
>>> correct    
Throughout the experience, I learned that influence is the critical component of leadership in convincing others with logical, emotional, and cooperative appeals.
>>> correct    

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