Tell me how orchestra concerts influence your emotions and create lasting memories.
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The orchestra is a combination of instruments with different tones.
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It looks so much like the world we live in.
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People with different looks and different personalities form families and create communities.
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I think the most important thing when playing an instrument is not to make our own sound, but to listen to others.
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Then we can create harmony.
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Our lives cannot be harmonized if we only insist on our thoughts and our voices.
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Whenever I listen to this kind of music, I look back on many of my mistakes to reveal myself.
>> Whenever I listen to this kind of music, I reflect on many of my mistakes to better understand myself.
I especially remember the mistake of not trying to listen to their thoughts from loved ones or close friends and only claiming that my thoughts were right.
>> I especially remember the mistake of not trying to listen to the thoughts of loved ones or close friends and only insisting that my own thoughts were right.
If I accept music with just the sound of listening to it with my ears, the emotion to me cannot last long.
>> If I perceive music only through the sound of listening with my ears, the emotion it evokes cannot last long.
I remember that moment for a long time when the performance becomes a story that tells me in words and a messages that shows me in action.
>> I remember that moment for a long time when the performance becomes a story that speaks to me in words and a message that reveals itself through action.
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