Tell me something about one of your business trips? When and where was your trip? Tell me in as much
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I don\'t think I have had a business trip, I worked at retail store, I transferred to another store last year. I wanted to explore more cities so I asked the company to transfer to new opening store. When I worked at the new store, I was nervous and excited at the same time. It turned out great experience because I got to know many new people and they became friends. I was relieved that everything went well.
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Hi, Ms. [Name]! Good answer. Even though it wasn’t a business trip, your story about transferring to a new store is clear and interesting. You explained your reason for moving, your feelings, and the positive outcome well. To improve, try adding a few specific details about the location or challenges to make it more engaging and natural for OPIC.
~T. Jenna
I don\'t think I have had a business trip. I worked at retail store, I transferred to another store last year.
>>I don\'t think I have ever been on a business trip. I worked at a retail store, and I transferred to another store last year.
I wanted to explore more cities so I asked the company to transfer to new opening store.
>>I wanted to explore more cities, so I asked the company to transfer me to a newly opened store.
When I worked at the new store, I was nervous and excited at the same time.
>>When I started working at the new store, I was nervous and excited at the same time.
It turned out great experience because I got to know many new people and they became friends. I was relieved that everything went well.
>> It turned out to be a great experience because I got to know many new people, and they became my friends.
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To be honest, I have never been on an official business trip because I worked in retail rather than in a corporate position. However, last year, I transferred to another store that had just opened in a different city. Since I wanted to explore new places and gain fresh experiences, I requested the transfer myself. At first, I felt both nervous and excited because I had to adapt to a new environment and work with unfamiliar colleagues. Fortunately, it turned out to be a very rewarding experience. I met many new people, learned different ways of working, and built strong friendships with my coworkers. Looking back, I was relieved that everything went smoothly, and the experience helped me become more confident and adaptable.
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