Tell something valuable that you know about Korea\'s history.
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, I guess that there was Japanese Invasion of Korea in 1592 and Yee Sun-Shin general. If he wasn\'t at that time, we haven\'t been until now. A strategy war of that is a Battle of Myeongyang. There were winning 300 ships with 12 ships.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for sharing about Korea\'s history by telling about the Japanese invasion or colonization. I understood the topic and what you were trying to convey in your sentences so that\'s good. However, there were some grammatical errors here which I replaced with some alternative sentences. Please review the vocabulary words \'battle\', \'against\', \'colonization\', \'free/freedom\', and \'former\'. Thank you so much!
- Teacher Raven :)
>> Japan colonized Korea in the year 1592, and former general Yee Sun-Shin won battles against them.
If he wasn\'t at that time, we haven\'t been until now.
>> If it wasn\'t for him, we would not have been free until now.
A strategy war of that is a Battle of Myeongyang.
>> That war was called the Battle of Myeongyang.
There were winning 300 ships with 12 ships.
>> 300 Japanese ships battled against 12 Korean ships.
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