Tell us something interesting about yourself
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Hi Charry! I have to make an essay so that they can put me in the right class based on my level. So can you give me a feedback once??
Hi my name is [이름][이름] Baeck. I’m living in South Korea. I\'m taking a leave of absence from the university. I recently discharged from the army. My position in the army was a fire observer of artillery. So I was deployed in front line called ‘GP’ so that I should observe the North Korea’s soldiers. I could learn how to handle with observation equipment, and also I studied how to calculate the coordinates to hit a shell. If you want to hear it in detail, I will tell you about it when I go there.
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Hi, Harry! :)
I\'m sorry it took a while for me to check your essay.
But here it is! ^_^
I hope this helps. Good luck and I hope you receive good results. Fighting! :)
I\'m sorry it took a while for me to check your essay.
But here it is! ^_^
I hope this helps. Good luck and I hope you receive good results. Fighting! :)
~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
I have to make an essay so that they can put me in the right class based on my level.
>> CORRECT!
So can you give me a feedback once??
>> So can you give me a feedback once?
>> So can you give me a feedback once?
Hi my name is [이름][이름] Baeck.
>> CORRECT!
I’m living in South Korea.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I am currently residing in South Korea.
I\'m taking a leave of absence from the university.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I will be on hiatus from the university.
I recently discharged from the army. My position in the army was a fire observer of artillery.
>> I was recently discharged from the army where I held the position of a fire observer in the artillery.
So I was deployed in front line called ‘GP’ so that I should observe the North Korea’s soldiers.
>> I was deployed as a front liner called ‘GP’ to observe and guard the North Korean soldiers.
I could learn how to handle with observation equipment, and also I studied how to calculate the coordinates to hit a shell.
>> I learned how to handle the observation equipment and studied how to calculate the coordinates to accurately hit a shell.
If you want to hear it in detail, I will tell you about it when I go there.
>> If you would like to hear more details about it, I would gladly share my experiences and what I\'ve learned when I go there.
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