- Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves. - Say why you think the job woul
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Dear, Jenny
I am so happy to hear that you want to find a job in my country, South Korea. So we could hang out more often it you had a job here. I am excited. Fortunately, it seems that I found a job which you might be suitable for you.
Let me explain in more detail, I saw a recruitment advertised in a newspaper called ‘Korean Times’. The recruitment was scuba-diving instructor who can speak English. Also, this job is provided a studio flat , every meals and chances to travel around Korea. I think that this job would be suitable for you. Because you are a bilingual person can speak Korean and English and you are qualified to teach scuba-diving skills and you had two-year experience about it.
If you are interested in it, you just follow the website I attached then you send you CV or other documents a employer need. I hope that you will like this job.
I look forward to hearing you soon.
Best regards,
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강사 첨삭
Here are my corrections.
I am so happy to hear that you want to find a job in my country, South Korea. So we could hang out more often it you had a job here. I am excited.
>>Correct!
Fortunately, it seems that I found a job which you might be suitable for you.
>>Fortunately, it seems that I found a job which might be suitable for you.
Let me explain in more detail, I saw a recruitment advertised in a newspaper called ‘Korean Times’. The recruitment was scuba-diving instructor who can speak English.
>>Let me explain in more details. I saw a recruitment advertisement in a newspaper called ‘Korean Times’. The recruitment was scuba-diving instructor who can speak English.
Also, this job is provided a studio flat , every meals and chances to travel around Korea. I think that this job would be suitable for you.
>>Also, this job is providing a studio flat, every meals, and chances to travel around Korea. I think that this job would be suitable for you.
Because you are a bilingual person can speak Korean and English and you are qualified to teach scuba-diving skills and you had two-year experience about it.
>>Because you are a bilingual person who can speak Korean and English, you had two-year job experience, then, you are qualified to teach scuba-diving skills.
If you are interested in it, you just follow the website I attached then you send you CV or other documents a employer need. I hope that you will like this job.
>>If you are interested in it, you just follow the website I attached, then you send your CV or other documents the employer need. I hope that you will like this job.
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