Temperature

2021-01-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: [ESSAY] How does a change in temperature affect your feelings or mood? At sunny day, I feel good but sometime, I feel displeasure. At rainy day, I feel displeasure too but I feel happy because on rainy day, my concentration go up. At cold day, I don\'t want to go out. At hot day, I don\'t want to go out ethier. I just stay at home reading or playing.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Clair!

Thanks for sending your homework. Speak soon!

Cheers,
Jean~~

                  Theme: [ESSAY] How does a change in temperature affect your feelings or mood?


At sunny day, I feel good but sometime, I feel displeasure.
>> On sunny days, I sometimes feel good, but there are also times that I feel unhappy.  
>> or: On sunny days, I sometimes feel good, but there are also moments that I feel displeased.

At rainy day, I feel displeasure too but I feel happy because on rainy day, my concentration go up.
>> On rainy days, I feel unhappy as well but once in a while, my concentration goes up so, during those times, I feel happy. 

At cold day, I don\'t want to go out.
>> On cold days, I don\'t want to go out. 

At hot day, I don\'t want to go out ethier. I just stay at home reading or playing.
>> On hot or warm days, I don\'t want to go out either. I prefer to stay at home reading or playing.

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