thank you
학생이 쓴 원문
i'll introduce you some activites that we can enjoy in the temple. the reason why i introduce these is i had a great time in the temple. and i hope you should know we can enjoy in the temple. however there are many activites in the temple but they have the best two avtivites. one is to eat temples lunch and the other is to make flowerlantern. lastely, l want you should have a memorable times in the temple like i did.
i have to use grammar relative pronoun, the adjective usage of infinitive, gerund and 'one ~ the other'.
sorry and thank you
강사 첨삭
Hello Ji [이름]! You have a nice story here. ^_^
~T. IRENE~
i\'ll introduce you some activites that we can enjoy in the temple.
>>> I want to talk/explain about some activities that we can enjoy in the temple.
the reason why I introduce these is i had a great time in the temple.
>>> The reason I chose this topic is because I had a great time in the temple when I went there.
and I hope you should know we can enjoy in the temple.
>>> I hope that after this, you will also enjoy and appreciate going to the temples.
however there are many activites in the temple but they have the best two avtivites.
>>> Well, there are a lot of activities in the temple but I want to talk about the two best things I enjoyed in there.
one is to eat temples lunch and the other is to make flowerlantern.
>>> One is eating their meals in the temple. Eating is my favorite activity so I really enjoyed doing that in the temple. The other activity is making flower lanterns.
lastely, l want you should have a memorable times in the temple like i did.
>>> That\'s it and I wish you will also experience a good activity in the temple.
~T. IRENE~
i\'ll introduce you some activites that we can enjoy in the temple.
>>> I want to talk/explain about some activities that we can enjoy in the temple.
the reason why I introduce these is i had a great time in the temple.
>>> The reason I chose this topic is because I had a great time in the temple when I went there.
and I hope you should know we can enjoy in the temple.
>>> I hope that after this, you will also enjoy and appreciate going to the temples.
however there are many activites in the temple but they have the best two avtivites.
>>> Well, there are a lot of activities in the temple but I want to talk about the two best things I enjoyed in there.
one is to eat temples lunch and the other is to make flowerlantern.
>>> One is eating their meals in the temple. Eating is my favorite activity so I really enjoyed doing that in the temple. The other activity is making flower lanterns.
lastely, l want you should have a memorable times in the temple like i did.
>>> That\'s it and I wish you will also experience a good activity in the temple.
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