Thanks for your love...
학생이 쓴 원문
Human beings are social creatures. When someone is born, his first society is already decided on his family.
After then, he becomes a grown-up within care of other senior family members. During this process, a wonderful
magic is occurred steadily and calmly. I think that voice tones, body languages, eye contacts, conversations
between his parents and him are totally influenced to the faith in his environment.
In my case, my parents are benignant and believe me all the time. But when I committed an error, they shows a
consistent and strict attitude. Hearted Conversations with tea always follow their descipline. And then My
parents leave me to get a right way for myself. So I have a firm value and trust for myself. These are used to
sail my life as a compass.
I love you.
강사 첨삭
Hi my dear!
You did a great job in this article. I think your parents are awesome. I hope yuou will continue to have a very strong and good relationship with them.
There were some slips in your sentences and below are the corrections. - Sally
Human beings are social creatures. When someone is born, his first society is already decided on his family.
>>> When someone is born, his first society is already decided by his family.After then, he becomes a grown-up within care of other senior family members.
>>> He would grow up within the care of his family and later on, with the other senior family members.
During this process, a wonderfulmagic is occurred steadily and calmly.
>>> During this process, a wonderful magic occurred steadily and calmly.
I think that voice tones, body languages, eye contacts, conversations between his parents and him are totally influenced to the faith in his environment.
>>> I think that voice tones, body languages, eye conatacts, conversations between him and his parents are totally influenced by his faith in his environment. In my case, my parents are benignant and believe me all the time.
>>> In my case, my parents are benignant and they believed me all the time.
But when I committed an error, they shows a consistent and strict attitude. Hearted Conversations with tea always follow their descipline.
>>> When I commit error, they show a consistently strict attitude but it was always followed by hearted conversations with cups of tea. I think it’s their way of disciplining me.
And then My parents leave me to get a right way for myself.
>>> After the conversation, they just let me decide for my self. They let me do the right thing on my own.
So I have a firm value and trust for myself. These are used to sail my life as a compass.
>>> That is why, I have a firm value and trust in myself. I used these lessons as a compass to sail swiftly in this life.
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