Thanksgiving Day
학생이 쓴 원문
I visted my grandparents last week.I went to baseballstadium with my father,uncle and my cousins.I cheered a lot to KIA Tigers member.I like there but I didn't enjoy the game.Because KIA lost the game.The score was 7:3.Then,I went my cousin's house.We played smartphone game very much.Next day,mom and I went to my grandmother house and I watched TV.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
I think you enjoyed your holiday except for your baseball team.
Don\'t worry, maybe there will be a next game.
Have a good day ahead!
See you on Thursday!
_Teacher Dianne ^^
I visted my grandparents last week.
>> I visited my grandparents last week.
I went to baseballstadium with my father,uncle and my cousins.
>> I went to a baseball stadium with my father, uncle, and my cousins.
I cheered a lot to KIA Tigers member.
>> I cheered a lot for a KIA Tigers member.
I like there but I didn\'t enjoy the game.Because KIA lost the game.
>> I like it there but I didn\'t enjoy the game because KIA lost the game.
The score was 7:3.Then,I went my cousin\'s house.
>> The score was 7-3 then after watching I went to my cousin\'s house.
We played smartphone game very much.
>> We played a smartphone game together.
>> Or: We are fond of playing smartphone games.
Next day,mom and I went to my grandmother house and I watched TV.
>> On the next day, my mom and I went to my grandmother\'s house and then I watched TV.
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