That
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is good thing to our health. when we are smoking, these our bodies would get a lot of bad things. Especially our lungs will get some sicks and a cancer.
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Good evening, [이름]!
Thank you so much for sending your homework.
I totally agree about what you said.
Not smoking would really benefit us well. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> That is a good thing for our health.
when we are smoking, these our bodies would get a lot of bad things.
>> When we are smoking, our bodies would be affected badly.
Especially our lungs will get some sicks and a cancer.
>> Our lungs will especially suffer and we might get cancer as well.
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