The advantages and disadvantages of taking risks
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Taking risk can give us responsibilities and wisdom to live our life. But it can also frustrate us and we should spend hard time. So we have to be serious when we have to take a risk and choose the right way to us. But whatever we choose regret follows so we should be ready to accept things after that,
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Taking risk can give us responsibilities and wisdom to live our life.
>> CORRECT
But it can also frustrate us and we should spend hard time.
>>But it can also frustrate us and let us have a hard time.
So we have to be serious when we have to take a risk and choose the right way to us.
>> So we have to be serious when we have to take a risk and choose the right thing for us.
But whatever we choose regret follows so we should be ready to accept things after that,
>> But whatever we choose, regret follows so we should be ready to accept things after that.
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