the advantages of being bilingual
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I think being bilingual has pros and cons at the same time. Langue isn\'t just tool for communication, it is one of important parts of cultures of the society. So you can speak and understand two or three langues, it means you have 2 or 3 different worlds. It could be a great chance to go forward in your life. You can get a job more easily than others, work and live abroad, avoid the tense domestic job market and make friends over the world, it\'ll make your mindset more flexible, it\'ll make your life more comfortable and plentiful. But I\'ve heard it could work to the opposite direction. Some who are bilingual and have lived in the two different societies can confuse their identity. They could have difficulties to fit the society as a common person. They could feel they don\'t belong to this world and that world. As an English learner struggling speaking English, I envy the bilinguals but I think I\'m ready to embrace their hardship, if they have.
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Hi!
Well done on this essay! You used some great vocabulary here as you expressed your answer well. I’ve made a few suggestions to help with sentence structure and articles. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
I think being bilingual has pros and cons at the same time.
>> CORRECT.
Langue isn\'t just tool for communication, it is one of important parts of cultures of the society.
>> Language isn’t just a tool for communication; it is one of the important parts of a society’s culture.
So you can speak and understand two or three langues, it means you have 2 or 3 different worlds.
>> So if you can speak and understand two or three languages, it means you have two or three different worlds.
It could be a great chance to go forward in your life.
>> CORRECT.
You can get a job more easily than others, work and live abroad, avoid the tense domestic job market and make friends over the world, it\'ll make your mindset more flexible, it\'ll make your life more comfortable and plentiful.
>> You can get a job more easily, work and live abroad, avoid the competitive domestic job market, and make friends all over the world. It can also make your mindset more flexible and your life more comfortable and fulfilling.
But I\'ve heard it could work to the opposite direction.
>> But I\'ve heard it could work in the opposite direction.
Some who are bilingual and have lived in the two different societies can confuse their identity.
>> Some bilingual people who have lived in two different societies can become confused about their identity.
They could have difficulties to fit the society as a common person.
>> They could have difficulty fitting into society as a common person.
They could feel they don\'t belong to this world and that world.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: They could feel like they don’t belong to either world.
As an English learner struggling speaking English, I envy the bilinguals but I think I\'m ready to embrace their hardship, if they have.
>> As an English learner who struggles with speaking English, I envy bilingual people, but I think I’m ready to accept their hardships as well, if they have any.
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