The advantages of living in an APT
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The advantages of living in an apartment are as follows.
1st. Apartments are quiet and independent spaces, so privacy is protected.
2nd. We can wear clothes comfortably and move freely in the house.
3rd. Apartments are better kept warm than housing.
4th. If we live on a high floor, we can see beautiful natural scenery
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I like the quality of your sentences this time.
This is a definite improvement.
I just focused on the organization so it would be easier to read.
Overall, you did a great job.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The advantages of living in an apartment are as follows.
>> Some advantages of living in an apartment are as follows:
1st. Apartments are quiet and independent spaces, so privacy is protected.
>> Some advantages of living in an apartment are as follows:
1st. Apartments are quiet and independent spaces, so privacy is protected.
>> First, apartments are quiet and independent spaces, so privacy is protected.
2nd. We can wear clothes comfortably and move freely in the house.
2nd. We can wear clothes comfortably and move freely in the house.
>> Second, we can wear clothes comfortably and move freely in the house.
3rd. Apartments are better kept warm than housing.
3rd. Apartments are better kept warm than housing.
>> Third, apartments are better kept warm than housing.
4th. If we live on a high floor, we can see beautiful natural scenery
4th. If we live on a high floor, we can see beautiful natural scenery
>> Fourth, if we live on a higher floor, we can see beautiful natural scenery.
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