The announcement for the Easter mass

2016-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Welcome everybody here. Everybody here at this venue have to register at the reception desk to attend this festival. The reception desk is located in the back of this auditorium. Please register first and join this event. I am going to give you the announcement again. Let’s us have a choir practice. I’ll brief you on the Ester Sunday mass, community day. As I already announced, This festival started from the registration. Everybody here in this venue have to register at the reception desk first. Please register at the reception desk first. I am sure that everybody here already know that Dea-Joen diesan bishop is supposed to hold the Easter mass here. He will come here around 10 o’clock and then we are planning to hold the welcome event. Before the mass. Let us altogether have a practice songs that we will use during the mass. Dae-Jeong diocese bishop is coming to here. So, Please gather around the entrance of this gym to welcome bishop. Please give him a big hands and give him a big round of applause

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Hello there Mr. [Name]. ^^Thank you very much for trusting me to correct your speech for your upcoming Easter Sunday mass and sports\' day in Dae-Jeon. ^^ I really hope these activities will be successful because I know that you and your group have prepared very hard for this. I hope you enjoy the sports\' day too. I know the games you have prepared are fun and are meant to strengthen the bond between all of you at church. ^^ This is a very rare occasion and it only happens once a year so make the most out of it. Have fun and stay safe. ~Teacher Charry (^_^) Welcome everybody here. >> CORRECT! OR >> Welcome everyone. Everybody here at this venue have to register at the reception desk to attend this festival. >> Everybody here in this venue has to register at the reception desk for this festival. The reception desk is located in the back of this auditorium. >> The reception desk is located at the back of this auditorium. Please register first and join this event. >> CORRECT! OR >> Please sign up and join this event. I am going to give you the announcement again. >> CORRECT! OR >> I\'m going to give an announcement again. Let’s us have a choir practice. >> Let’s have a choir practice. OR >> Let us have a choir practice.I’ll brief you on the Ester Sunday mass, community day. >> I’ll brief you on the Ester Sunday mass and community day. OR >> I’ll brief you about the Ester Sunday mass and community day.As I already announced, This festival started from the registration. >> As I already announced, this festival will start from the registration. Everybody here in this venue have to register at the reception desk first. >> Everybody here in this venue has to register at the reception desk first.Please register at the reception desk first. >> CORRECT! OR >> Please sign up at the reception desk first.I am sure that everybody here already know that Dea-Joen diesan bishop is supposed to hold the Easter mass here. >> I am sure that everybody here already knows that the Dea-Jeon diocesan bishop will be holding the Easter mass here with us. He will come here around 10 o’clock and then we are planning to hold the welcome event. >> He will come here at around 10 o’clock and we are planning to hold a welcoming event for him.Before the mass. Let us altogether have a practice songs that we will use during the mass. >> Before the mass, let us altogether practice the songs that we will use during the mass.Dae-Jeong diocese bishop is coming to here. So, Please gather around the entrance of this gym to welcome bishop. >> The Dae-Jeon diocesan bishop is coming to here so, please gather around the entrance of this gym to welcome him.Please give him a big hands and give him a big round of applause >> Please shake his hand and give him a big round of applause.

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