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Thinking Statement
1. These day, personal information is important problem social and individual.
2. Government can check criminals easily but, good people can be violated privacy.
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Teacher Lexi
Please see my corrections below:
Thinking Statement1. These day, personal information is important problem social and individual.
>>These days, divulging personal information is an important social and individual issue. 2. Government can check criminals easily but, good people can be violated privacy.
>>Government can check criminals easily but privacy of good people can be violated.
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