The Answer: Opening A Ddungcarong Store
학생이 쓴 원문
If I have an opportunity to start a business, I would like to open a \'ddungcarong\' store in other countries. A ddungcarong is a thick macaroon; however many foreigners don\'t know about ddungcarong since it is made by Korean and can be found only in Korea. When we eat macaroons, we easily feel the lack of the amount and this was the reason why Korean bakers made ddungcarong. It is much bigger than the original macaroons and it has many filling with other snacks in it. Therefore, many Korean consumers no longer save the last bite and fully enjoy the dessert. I am sure that people all over the world will love its shape and taste regardless of the age of sex. Thus, I would like to open a ddungcarong store in other countries informing Korea\'s food culture and making a lot of money.
강사 첨삭
Wow!
It\'s the first time I\'ve ever heard of this food. :o
If you ever do open that business, I\'d gladly be your first customer! ~~
~t. Ally
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If I have an opportunity to start a business, I would like to open a \'ddungcarong\' store in other countries. A ddungcarong is a thick macaroon; however many foreigners don\'t know about ddungcarong since it is made by Korean and can be found only in Korea. When we eat macaroons, we easily feel the lack of the amount and this was the reason why Korean bakers made ddungcarong. It is much bigger than the original macaroons and it has many filling with other snacks in it. Therefore, many Korean consumers no longer save the last bite and fully enjoy the dessert. I am sure that people all over the world will love its shape and taste regardless of the age of sex. Thus, I would like to open a ddungcarong store in other countries informing Korea\'s food culture and making a lot of money.
>> If I have an opportunity to start a business, I would like to open a \'ddungcarong\' store in other countries. A ddungcarong is a thick macaroon; however many foreigners don\'t know about ddungcarong since it is made by Koreans and can be found only in Korea. When we eat macaroons, we easily feel the lack of the amount and this was the reason why Korean bakers made ddungcarong. It is much bigger than the original macaroons and it has many fillings, with other kinds of snacks inside it. Therefore, many Korean consumers no longer save the last bite and fully enjoy the dessert. I am sure that people all over the world will love its shape and taste regardless of the age or sex. Thus, I would like to open a ddungcarong store in other countries to let other people discover Korea\'s food culture, and make a lot of money.
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