the beach

Today, it was too hot to move, but I went out to the beach for exercise where cicadas were singing still now. The vertically halved moon was in the middle of the pinky grey sky. At the dusk the perforated lights over the KwangAn Bridge were blinking on backing to the grey sky. When I walked back to the start line it became slightly dark and the colorful neons were started to light on. The colorful lights of buildings along the coast, the lined lights over the bridge, small fishing boats floating on the dark ocean, and people walking in their silhouette were so beautiful that they looked like a fantasy. Having walked twice there back and forth as I used to do, I went to go to the Mega Market to pick stuffs from the locker. I was very satisfied with these activities for a day’s exercise.

Hi Ms. [Name]! You have here a very good composition. As you can notice I haven't done any major changes or corrections. Keep it up Ms. [Name]!! Lei :-) Today, it was too hot to move, but I went out to the beach for exercise where cicadas were singing still now.  >>correct The vertically halved moon was in the middle of the pinkish grey sky.  >>correct At dusk, the perforated lights over the KwangAn Bridge were blinking on backing to the grey sky.  >>correct When I walked back to the start line it became slightly dark and the colorful neons started to light on.  >>correct The colorful lights from the buildings along the coast, the lined lights over the bridge, small fishing boats floating on the dark ocean,  >>correct and people walking in their silhouette were so beautiful that they looked like a fantasy.  >>correct Having walked twice there back and forth as I used to do, I went to Mega Market to pick stuffs from the locker.  >>correct I was very satisfied with these activities for the day’s exercise. >>correct