The Bear and the Two Travelers

2012-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

학생이 쓴 원문

Jack and Jane like to travel all over the world. They believe each other. One day, they meet big bear!!! It is very dangerous animal!! Jack climbs the tree alone!! Jane can't climb the tree and his friend climbs the tree alone! He lie down the path and behave died. Bear sniffs his body, and it goes back! Jane open his eyes and stands up! Jack jumps to the path! And then Jack says "Are you Okay?" But Jane only says"The bear says your not true friend!!" Jack lower his head. When I choose my best friend, I will choose friend like stick and belive any situations

강사 첨삭

Hi Sarah! Thank you for this wonderful story that you\'ve shared with me. A friend is like a treasure so it\'s really hard to find a true one. Just always remember that I am you\'re friend Sarah okay? ^^ See you in class! I am so excited to talk to you! Cheerios! teacher GRACE Jack and Jane like to travel all over the world. >> Correct They believe each other. >> They believe on each other\'s way of thinking.One day, they meet big bear!!! >> One day, they met a big bear.  It is very dangerous animal!! Jack climbs the tree alone!! >> It was a very dangerous animal. Jack climbed the tree alone.Jane can\'t climb the tree and his friend climbs the tree alone! >> Jane can\'t climb the tree so his friend went on alone. He lie down the path and behave died. >> She lied down just under the tree and pretended to have died already.Bear sniffs his body, and it goes back! >> The bear sniffed her body and it went back. Jane open his eyes and stands up! Jack jumps to the path! >> Jane opened her eyes and stood up. Jack then jumped where Jane was.And then Jack says \"Are you Okay?\" But Jane only says\"The bear says your not true friend!!\"Jack lower his head. >> Jack asked, \"Are you okay?\" But Jane replied saying, \" The bear said you\'re not a good friend!\"When I choose my best friend, I will choose friend like stick and belive any situations >> If I\'ll choose my bestfriend, I will pick someone who will stick with me even on tough situations.

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