The benefit of trees

2016-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Today I would like to talk about the benefit of trees. It is well-know knowledge that trees have been doing a lot of important role in the ecosystem that we are living. Trees protect the soil. So, tree loss affect soil integrity. Huge amount of plants as well as insects, worms, reptiles and amphibians and small mammals relies on a dense canopy of branches. Trees also help prevent erosion. Because tree roots stabilize the soil. The trees provide all animals and plants with good habitats. The most important good factor of trees is that. that provide a natural defense against air pollution. They remove carbon dioxide from the atmosphere while they emit oxygen and their leaves filter pollutants from the air. Deforestation is a serious problem, and finding a solution to it will not be simple. I involves a lot of different countries and many political and economic factors. However, as individuals we can each make our contribution to the solution. It involves being more responsible about our use of products that come from logging. So, how we can find the way to stop or loose deforestation.

강사 첨삭

Today I would like to talk about the benefit of trees. 

>> Today I would like to talk about the benefits of trees. 
 It is well-know knowledge that trees have been doing a lot of important role in the ecosystem that we are living. 

>>  It is a well-known knowledge that trees have been doing a lot of important role in the ecosystem that we are living. 
 Trees protect the soil.

>> correct!

So, tree loss affect soil integrity.

>> So tree loss affects the soil integrity.

Huge amount of plants as well as insects, worms, reptiles and amphibians and small mammals relies on a dense canopy of branches. 

>> Huge amount of plants as well as insects, worms, reptiles and amphibians and small mammals rely on a dense canopy of branches. 
 Trees also help prevent erosion.

>> correct!

Because tree roots stabilize the soil.
>> correct! 
 The trees provide all animals and plants with good habitats.

>> correct! 
 The most important good factor of trees is that. that provide a natural defense against air pollution.

>> The most important good factor of trees is that it provides a natural defense against air pollution. 

They remove carbon dioxide from the atmosphere while they emit oxygen and their leaves filter pollutants from the air.
>> 
correct!  
Deforestation is a serious problem, and finding a solution to it will not be simple.

>> correct!  

I involves a lot of different countries and many political and economic factors.

>> It involves a lot of different countries and many political and economic factors.
 However, as individuals we can each make our contribution to the solution.

>>  However, as individuals we can make our contributions to give solutions to the problem. 

It involves being more responsible about our use of products that come from logging.

>> correct!
 So, how we can find the way to stop or loose deforestation.

>> So, how can we find the way to stop  or loose deforestation?

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