The benefits and disadvantages of siblings

2010-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jennifer

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There are various advantages and disadvantages to having siblings. Speaking at the adventages, children with a sibling are better able to make and maintain friendships. This is an important thing in life. The world is where people live together,we have to learn a sociality from our siblings. Second, people with siblings might have strong independence. The reason why they haven't possessed enough things since they were born, so they had to find by themselves what it was needed. Not a good thing of siblings, people have to share everything with their siblings. If mother buy or make some food, they should divide it equally to eat. Not only for food but also for clothes are in same case.

강사 첨삭

There are various advantages and disadvantages to having siblings. >> Correct.Speaking at the adventages, children with a sibling are better able to make and maintain friendships. >> Speaking of the advantages, children with siblings are better in making and maintaining friendships. This is an important thing in life. >> Correct.The world is where people live together,we have to learn a sociality from our siblings. >> The world is where people live together and a person learns how to socialize through their siblings.Second, people with siblings might have strong independence. >> Second, people with siblings become more independent.  The reason why they haven't possessed enough things since they were born, so they had to find by themselves what it was needed. >> The reason is that, they were not able to possess everything since they were born, so they have to find what they need. Not a good thing of siblings, people have to share everything with their siblings. >> One disadvantage of having siblings is that a person has to share everything he has with his or her siblings.  If mother buy or make some food, they should divide it equally to eat. Not only for food but also for clothes are in same case. >> If a mother buys or makes some food, the siblings should divide it equally along themselves. It doesn’t just apply to food but to clothes also.

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