The best Christmas activity

2020-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

The church I attend worship has a small festival every year on Christmas Eve. On this day, all young children and adults gather to show hymns, worship dances, biblical dramas, and one-act plays. I always host at this festival. I also teach children about warship dance or drama and I play too. So the best Christmas activity I join is to take part in the Christmas Eve festival.

강사 첨삭

Good day Ms. [이름] Ha!
~Lucy

The church I attend worship has a small festival every year on Christmas Eve.
>>The church I attend to worship has a small festival every year on Christmas Eve.
On this day, all young children and adults gather to show hymns, worship dances, biblical dramas, and one-act plays.
>>CORRECT!
I always host at this festival.
>>CORRECT!
I also teach children about warship dance or drama and I play too.
>>CORRECT!
So the best Christmas activity I join is to take part in the Christmas Eve festival.
>>CORRECT!

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