The best place in my city
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I live in Ulsan, Korea and I have lived here since I was born.
I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I\\\'m happy with my life staying here.
Your question made me think about the places that I find comfortable and interesting.
looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
Whenever I invited my friends here, I used to take them to almost the same places all the time.
Above all, I took them to the area called \\\'Samsan\\\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
For example, The restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
I can just pick and grab something tasty as long as I have enough money. :)
Plus, We can enjoy shopping or watching movies and There are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
There is also a Ferris Whee on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
All of my friends really enjoyed riding it because we could see a great night view.
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Incredible, Elena! I am impressed by your writing. Most of the sentences and grammatically correct. I was also able to picture out your city through your answer. Keep it up!-Faith-
I live in Ulsan, Korea and I have lived here since I was born.
>> CORRECT
OR I was born and raised in Ulsan, Korea.
I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I\\\'m happy with my life staying here.
>> I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I\'m happy with my life staying here.
Your question made me think about the places that I find comfortable and interesting.
Your question made me think about the places that I find comfortable and interesting.
>> CORRECT
looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
>> Looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
Whenever I invited my friends here, I used to take them to almost the same places all the time.
Whenever I invited my friends here, I used to take them to almost the same places all the time.
>> CORRECT
OR We would usually tour the same places.
Above all, I took them to the area called \\\'Samsan\\\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
Above all, I took them to the area called \\\'Samsan\\\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
>> Above all, I took them to the area called \'Samsan\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
For example, The restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
For example, The restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
>> For example, the restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
I can just pick and grab something tasty as long as I have enough money. :)
I can just pick and grab something tasty as long as I have enough money. :)
>> CORRECT
Plus, We can enjoy shopping or watching movies and There are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
Plus, We can enjoy shopping or watching movies and There are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
>> Plus, we can enjoy shopping or watching movies and there are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
There is also a Ferris Whee on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
There is also a Ferris Whee on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
>> There is also a Ferris Wheel on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
All of my friends really enjoyed riding it because we could see a great night view.
All of my friends really enjoyed riding it because we could see a great night view.
>> CORRECT
OR We always had fun on it because it showed us a fantastic night view.
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