the best year

2019-01-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

2014 is the best year to me as I experienced various things. I was first grade at that year and I met many different people from the table tennis club and drinking party. I studied hard to enter the college that I want to enter and I wanted to go through many activities after the Suneung. I met my best friends from the class and we always went to somewhere together such as festival. At the festival, we enjoyed the music and drinking and it was so fun. At that year, our members didn\'t worry about anything because we were first grade, so we could improve our relationship by spending plenty of time together. Thesedays, we have our own tasks and need to prepare the graduation, so we don\'t have much time and it is hard for us to adjust our schedules to each other. Sometimes, I use to remember those memories.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

Happy New Year! May this year be full of adventure and happy memories for you. Enjoy it!(\",)

~Lynn

2014 is the best year to me as I experienced various things.

>> correct!

I was first grade at that year and I met many different people from the table tennis club and drinking party.

>> I was on my first grade/year and I met many different people from the tennis club and drinking parties.

I studied hard to enter the college that I want to enter and I wanted to go through many activities after the Suneung.

>> I studied hard to enter the college that I wanted to enter and I wanted to go through many activities after the Suneung.

I met my best friends from the class and we always went to somewhere together such as festival.

>> I met my best friends from the class and we always went somewhere together such as festivals. 

At the festival, we enjoyed the music and drinking and it was so fun.

>> At the festival, we enjoyed the music and drinking and it was so much fun. 

At that year, our members didn\'t worry about anything because we were first grade, so we could improve our relationship by spending plenty of time together.

>> At that year, our members didn\'t worry about anything because we were freshmen, so we could improve our relationship by spending plenty of time together.

These days, we have our own tasks and need to prepare the graduation, so we don\'t have much time and it is hard for us to adjust our schedules to each other.

>> These days, we have our own tasks and we need to prepare for graduation, so we don\'t have much time and it is hard for us to adjust our schedules to each other.

Sometimes, I use to remember those memories.

>> Sometimes, I remember our happy memories together.

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