The biggest change of Korean families.
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The biggest change of Korean families is having one child or not. I have 5 friends who have been meeting often. Only one friend has two children other friends have one child or not. Korea is the lowest country of birth rate in OECD(Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development). Korean population is getting decreasing. It is one of big problem in Korea. Nowadays, Raising a child needs lots of money. Parents these days don\'t totally sacrifice for children. They want to enjoy their life instead of having two children. In my case, I have wanted have three children, but It\'s sorry to my children because I can\'t support them economically as much as they want.
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The biggest change of Korean families.
The biggest change of Korean families is having one child or not.
>>> The biggest change in Korean families is having one child or no children at all.
I have 5 friends who have been meeting often.
>>> I have 5 friends whom I\'m meeting very often.
Only one friend has two children other friends have one child or not.
>>> Only one among them has two children other friends have one child and others none.
Korea is the lowest country of birth rate in OECD(Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development).
>>> Korea has the lowest birth rate according to OECD(Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development).
Korean population is getting decreasing.
>>> The Korean population is decreasing.
It is one of big problem in Korea. Nowadays, Raising a child needs lots of money.
>>> It is one of the biggest problems in Korea. Nowadays, raising a child needs lots of money.
Parents these days don\'t totally sacrifice for children.
>>> Parents these days don\'t totally sacrifice for their children.
They want to enjoy their life instead of having two children.
>>> They want to enjoy their life instead of having two children.
In my case, I have wanted have three children, but It\'s sorry to my children because I can\'t support them economically as much as they want.
>>> In my case, I have wanted to have three children, but I\'ll just feel sorry for my children because I can\'t support them economically as much as they want.
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