The biggest goal in my life.

2018-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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The biggest goal in my life is to become always happy. I am happy often now, of course, but I want to be always happy. In other words, I want to continue to be happy and feel more fully happy. For this, I think that sometimes I should feel accomplishment for my job and I should be satisfied with something small but important everyday. So, I set a goal to reach so that I could feel accomplishment. I will go abroad for my job and enter the best university to get a scholarship which is helpful for my job. And for thanking daily life, I will train myself to think of good thing in my daily life everyday. I think that these two things make me more happy.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Thank you for doing your homework ^^

Wow! So much for being optimistic ☺

Stay positive and you\'ll reach your goal ♥

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The biggest goal in my life is to become always happy.

>> The biggest goal in my life is to always be happy.


I am happy often now, of course, but I want to be always happy.

>> I am often happy now, of course, but I want to always be happy.


In other words, I want to continue to be happy and feel more fully happy.

>> CORRECT


For this, I think that sometimes I should feel accomplishment for my job and I should be satisfied with something small but important everyday.

>> For this, I think that sometimes I should feel accomplished for my job and I should be satisfied with something small but important every day.


So, I set a goal to reach so that I could feel accomplishment.

>> So, I set a goal to reach so that I could feel accomplished.


I will go abroad for my job and enter the best university to get a scholarship which is helpful for my job.

>> CORRECT


And for thanking daily life, I will train myself to think of good thing in my daily life everyday.

>> I am also thankful for my daily life, I will train myself to think of good things in my daily life every day.


I think that these two things make me more happy.

>> CORRECT

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