The biggest pet peeve in technology

2018-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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Since my smartphone is one of my closest friends, which can be closer than anybody in the way I am always with it, it has a big influence on my life or mood. I heavily rely on a transportation app on my phone, so its battery status is the matter. My phone is over 2 years old and consumes a lot of battery even on standby mode. I start feeling worried at the point from 65% of battery because I know that It will be under 50% next time I turn it on. After 50% it takes a blink of an eye for my phone to die. To prevent no-phone on the street, I really take care of how to spend effectively battery a whole day by distributing right amount on right times ( My phone is too old to get charged fast by extra battery). It's sometimes really annoying that its battery is all gone away for no reason when I need to use and I have to take care of this little thing while doing other things. I am going to get a new phone soon.

강사 첨삭

Happy Thursday [이름]!

When we are so engage in using our mobile phones, it would cause our battery to be drained easily. There are also some applications on mobile that could definitely eat our battery life even without using it. Thank you for sharing this piece with me. Have a great day!

~Teacher Eunice 


Since my smartphone is one of my closest friends, which can be closer than anybody in the way I am always with it, it has a big influence on my life or mood.

>>> Since my smartphone is one of my closest friends, which can be closer than anybody in the way I am always with it. It has a big influence on my life or mood.
 I heavily rely on a transportation app on my phone, so its battery status is the matter.

>>> I heavily rely on the transportation app on my phone, so its battery status matters. 
My phone is over 2 years old and consumes a lot of battery even on standby mode.

>>> Correct!

>>> OR: I\'ve been using my phone for over two years now, and it consumes battery even it\'s on power saving mode.
 I start feeling worried at the point from 65% of battery because I know that It will be under 50% next time I turn it on.

>>> I start feeling worried if I only have 65% battery left because I know that it will be under 50% the next time I\'ll turn it on.
 After 50% it takes a blink of an eye for my phone to die.

>>> After 50%, it takes a blink of an eye for my phone to turn off.
 To prevent no-phone on the street, I really take care of how to spend effectively battery a whole day by distributing right amount on right times ( My phone is too old to get charged fast by extra battery).

>>> To prevent from having no-phone on the street, I\'m being careful on how to spend my battery effectively for the whole day by using the right amount on the right time. ( My phone is too old to be charged fast on the power bank).
 It\'s sometimes really annoying that its battery is all gone away for no reason when I need to use and I have to take care of this little thing while doing other things.

>>> It\'s sometimes really annoying that my battery was drained for no reason when I need to use it, and I have to take care of this little thing while doing other things.
 I am going to get a new phone soon.

>>> Correct!

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