The car I\'d like to introduce!
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t have a driver\'s license although many of my friends have it. Therefore, I\'m not interested in a car, so I don\'t have a dream car. However, I\'d like to introduce a car that looks great!
Have you ever heard of the Lamborghini? It looks awesome! Its body shape is sharp, so it looks strong and attractive.
However, it is really expensive. It costs $200 million to three billion! Therefore, the Lamborghini becomes a symbol of the rich. You can see a few Lamborghini in the city where many rich people live.
I don\'t want to have that car. Because I think it\'s better to buy a house instead of buying an expensive car. However, I hope that I can drive the Lamborghini someday. It would be an unforgettable experience!
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! I love your thoughts in this essay because you show good judgment on things that matter. -Faith-
I don\'t have a driver\'s license although many of my friends have it. >> CORRECT
Therefore, I\'m not interested in a car, so I don\'t have a dream car.
>> Therefore, I\'m not interested in cars, so I don\'t have a dream car.
However, I\'d like to introduce a car that looks great!
>> CORRECT
OR: However, I\'d like to describe a luxury car to you!
Have you ever heard of the Lamborghini?
Have you ever heard of the Lamborghini?
>> Have you ever heard of Lamborghini?
It looks awesome!
>> CORRECT
Its body shape is sharp, so it looks strong and attractive.
>> Its body type is sharp, so it looks strong and attractive.
However, it is really expensive.
However, it is really expensive.
>> CORRECT
OR: Nevertheless, it costs an arm and a leg.
It costs $200 million to three billion!
>> CORRECT
Therefore, the Lamborghini becomes a symbol of the rich.
>> Therefore, Lamborghini becomes a symbol of the rich.
You can see a few Lamborghini in the city where many rich people live.
>> Usually, you can see a few Lamborghini cars in the city where many rich people live.
I don\'t want to have that car. Because I think it\'s better to buy a house instead of buying an expensive car.
I don\'t want to have that car. Because I think it\'s better to buy a house instead of buying an expensive car.
>> I don\'t want to have that car because I think it\'s better to buy a house instead of buying an expensive car.
However, I hope that I can drive the Lamborghini someday.
>> Nonetheless, I hope that I can drive a Lamborghini car someday.
It would be an unforgettable experience!
>> CORRECT
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