The Changeable Trend In Real Estate Brokerage

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The Changeable Trend In Real Estate Brokerage

Direct real estate brokers startups such as Ziptos, DawinJunggae have received attention and existing real estate advertising platforms such as Jikbang have expanded their business, which casts war clouds in the real estate brokerage market.

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The government which agrees with public opinion that current estate agent\'s fees are levied excessively announces the plan of decrease in the rates of estate agent commission fees, which grows brokers’ backlash. 

>> The government which agrees with public opinion that current estate agents\' fees are levied excessively announces the plan of decrease in the rates of estate agents\' commission fees, which grows brokers’ backlash. 

It is reported that Some brokers are closed temporarily against the government’s announcement. 

>> It is reported that some brokers are closed temporarily against the government’s announcement. 

What could people do for this dispute to lead to developmental results in real estate market? 

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The answer is that real estate brokers shouldn’t be satisfied with the current situation.

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If people don’t break the structure of the real estate brokerage market which run through collusion, there is no such thing as a result without fairly competitive ways. 

>> If people don’t break the structure of the real estate brokerage market which runs through collusion, there is no such thing as a result without fairly competitive ways. 

It is time to make improvements on real estate brokerage market that the public can accept.

>> It is time to make improvements on the real estate brokerage market that the public can accept.