The characteristics of territory
학생이 쓴 원문
To build country, we must have enough territory and people. In the past, concept of territory was more important than nowadays. Recently, the more the internet develop, the less the importance is. Even if the concept of territory is less important, it is important yet.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Mark! Thank you for giving time and effort in making your composition. Territory, then, us much more than property. It forms a fundamental part of who we are as people. We will discuss more about this in class. I will see you then. Keep safe! ~T. Lyn
To build country, we must have enough territory and people.
>>To build a nation, you must have a enough territory and enough people.
In the past, concept of territory was more important than nowadays.
>>The concept of territory was more important in the past than it is today.
Recently, the more the internet develop, the less the importance is.
>>As the internet develops in recent years, its importance is diminishing.
Even if the concept of territory is less important, it is important yet.
>>Even if the concept of territory is less important, it is still important.
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