The chart below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and proje

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Let\'s look first an Yemen\'s graph in 2000.

>> Let\'s take a look first at the first graph of Yemen in 2000.

We can see the largest part; 0 to 14 years part that is the young people group in Yemen and their rate is 50.1%.

>> We can see the largest part, with a rate of 50.1%, that shows people who are in 0 to 14 years of age.

However, they are diminished at 2050.

>> However, there will be a decrease in number in the year 2050.
The middle age group is also enormous as 46.3% but they are going to grow at 2050 as 57.3%.

>> The middle-age group is also as enormous as 46.3% but they will increase in 2050 to 57.3%.

This means that the younger group goes on the middle group in the future but their percentage is different from 2000 because the middle group will involve both past younger group and past older group at 2050.

>> This means that the younger group will be mixed with the middle-age group in the future. However, the percentage is different from the year 2000 because the groups are all involved in the changes.
 Lastly, the populations of the old group are approximately same between 2000 and 2050.

>> Lastly, the population of the old group is almost equal both in 2000 and 2050.
 The populations of Italy, in the other hand, the largest group is the middle age group at 2000. It means that the old age group will be bigger at 2050.

>> For Italy, the largest group in 2000 is the middle-age group.

It means that the old age group will be bigger at 2050.

>> It also shows that the old-age group will be bigger in the year 2050.

We can see the astonishing change without the younger group in Italy chart compared with the Yemen\'s one.

>> We can see the astonishing difference in number of the younger group in Italy compared in Yemen.
 I think Italy will have more difficulty of aging problem than Yemen.

>>  Therefore, I think Italy will have a bigger aging problem than Yemen.
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>> CORRECT