The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divide

2019-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 May

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These chart have all different percentage. Let\'s see the North America\'s chart first. Their industrial using is the most enormous in this chart and it\'s rate\'s are 48%. The agricultural use of water is the secondly high in there, by 39%, and the lower one is domestic using. In the same way, The chart of Europe is likely same with North America but their percentage is not exactly same. Whereas other countries without Northern America and Europe have higher percentage of an agricultural using. However, there is also a difference each other. Domestic using rates are higher than industrial using in Central Asia and South America when the industrial using rates are higher than the domestic using in Africa and South east Asia. In research, there is a different results surprisingly in same country like America or Asia. We can\'t recognize of the reason why these results come from, but we know that how water was used in these countries. // 1.c/2.a/3.a/4.b/5.c/6.a/7.c/8.b

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These chart have all different percentage.

>> This chart shows different rates.

Let\'s see the North America\'s chart first.

>> Let\'s take a look at the North America\'s chart first.

Their industrial use is the most enormous in this chart and it\'s rate\'s are 48%.

>> Their industrial use got the highest rate of 48%.

The agricultural use of water is the secondly high in there, by 39%, and the lower one is domestic using.

>> The agricultural use of water, which has a rate of 39% is the second highest, and the lowest one is the domestic use.

In the same way, The chart of Europe is likely same with North America but their percentage is not exactly same.

Whereas other countries without Northern America and Europe have higher percentage of an agricultural using.

>> The chart of Europe is likely the same with North America but their percentage is not exactly same, whereas other countries have higher percentage of an agricultural use.

However, there is also a difference each other.

>> However, there is also a difference.

Domestic using rates are higher than industrial using in Central Asia and South America when the industrial using rates are higher than the domestic using in Africa and South east Asia.

>> The domestic use rates are higher than the industrial use in Central Asia and South America. And the rates of industrial use are higher than the domestic use in Africa and South east Asia.

In research, there is a different results surprisingly in same country like America or Asia.

>> In a research, the results are surprisingly different in same countries in America or Asia.

We can\'t recognize of the reason why these results come from, but we know that how water was used in these countries.

>> We can\'t identify the reason where these results come from, but we know how water was used in these countries.
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