The city I want to live
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I continuously want to live in Marine city in Haeundae in Busan where I’ve been living now. Firstly, there are almost all of things that I want. For example,there are so many different kinds of restaurants and markets and park even all kinds of academies. I can eat great foods at fancy restaurant looking at the ocean just walking for a few minutes. Secondly, This city is very clean and safe. It doesn’t happen crimes at all. Additionally, the view is incredible and fantastic. I think night view is more incredible. I think Marine city in haeundae is the best city that is good to live.
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Hi [이름]!
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T. DON
I continuously want to live in Marine city in Haeundae in Busan where
I’ve been living now. Firstly, there are almost all of things that I
want. For example,there are so many different kinds of restaurants and
markets and park even all kinds of academies. I can eat great foods at
fancy restaurant looking at the ocean just walking for a few minutes.
Secondly, This city is very clean and safe. It doesn’t happen crimes at
all. Additionally, the view is incredible and fantastic. I think night
view is more incredible. I think Marine city in haeundae is the best
city that is good to live.
>> I continuously want to live in Marine city in Haeundae in Busan where
I’ve been living now. Firstly, there are almost all of things that I
want. For example, there are so many different kinds of restaurants and
markets and parks, even all kinds of academies. I can eat great foods at
a fancy restaurant looking at the ocean while just walking for a few minutes.
Secondly, This city is very clean and safe city. Crimes doesn\'t happen at
all. Additionally, the view is incredible and fantastic. I think the night
view is more incredible. I think Marine city in Haeundae is the best
city that is good to live.
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