The country I want to live in?
학생이 쓴 원문
Korea is beautiful country. Seventy percent of Korean territory is covered with mountains. It is good for hiking and trekking. The hikers at least once a month are about 18 millions. Too many people go to the mountains. There are too many people in Korea. Korea is very competitive and anti-humanity. It is a consequence of rapid economic growth. And so, there are a lot of people who is doing 'gapjil'. I don't like such thing. I have never considered living permanently in other country. But the best country to live is many in the world. Among the countries I have visited are the Canada and Australia. These two countries are not competitive and very broad. And also, it's landscape is very beautiful. But I don't want to leave Korea. I have too many things used in Korea. And I know a lot of people. If I leave in Korea, I should give up all things and people. I don't like to choose that.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
There\'s no place like home as the old saying goes. I have experienced living in Bangkok for three years and although there are better things there, nothing can replace living in the Philippines so I can understand how you feel. You wrote a very good composition. Your grammar is way better now and your sentences are longer. Way to to go, [이름]!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Korea is beautiful country.
>> Korea is a beautiful country.
Seventy percent of Korean territory is covered with mountains.
>> correct!
It is good for hiking and trekking.
>> correct!
The hikers at least once a month are about 18 millions.
>> There are at least 18 million hikers in a month.
Too many people go to the mountains.
>> correct!
OR>> Many people go hiking.
There are too many people in Korea.
>> correct!
Korea is very competitive and anti-humanity.
>> correct!
It is a consequence of rapid economic growth.
>> correct!
And so, there are a lot of people who is doing \'gapjil\'.
>> And so, there are a lot of people who are doing \'gapjil\'.
I don\'t like such thing.
>> correct!
I have never considered living permanently in other country.
>> I have never considered living permanently in another country.
But the best country to live is many in the world.
>> But there are many excellent places to live in the world.
Among the countries I have visited are the Canada and Australia.
>> Among the countries I have visited are Canada and Australia.
These two countries are not competitive and very broad.
>> correct!
And also, it\'s landscape is very beautiful. But I don\'t want to leave Korea.
>> correct!
I have too many things used in Korea.
>> I have too many useful things in Korea.
And I know a lot of people.
>> correct!
If I leave in Korea, I should give up all things and people.
>> If I leave Korea, I should give up many things and people.
I don\'t like to choose that.
>> I don\'t like to do that.
There\'s no place like home as the old saying goes. I have experienced living in Bangkok for three years and although there are better things there, nothing can replace living in the Philippines so I can understand how you feel. You wrote a very good composition. Your grammar is way better now and your sentences are longer. Way to to go, [이름]!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Korea is beautiful country.
>> Korea is a beautiful country.
Seventy percent of Korean territory is covered with mountains.
>> correct!
It is good for hiking and trekking.
>> correct!
The hikers at least once a month are about 18 millions.
>> There are at least 18 million hikers in a month.
Too many people go to the mountains.
>> correct!
OR>> Many people go hiking.
There are too many people in Korea.
>> correct!
Korea is very competitive and anti-humanity.
>> correct!
It is a consequence of rapid economic growth.
>> correct!
And so, there are a lot of people who is doing \'gapjil\'.
>> And so, there are a lot of people who are doing \'gapjil\'.
I don\'t like such thing.
>> correct!
I have never considered living permanently in other country.
>> I have never considered living permanently in another country.
But the best country to live is many in the world.
>> But there are many excellent places to live in the world.
Among the countries I have visited are the Canada and Australia.
>> Among the countries I have visited are Canada and Australia.
These two countries are not competitive and very broad.
>> correct!
And also, it\'s landscape is very beautiful. But I don\'t want to leave Korea.
>> correct!
I have too many things used in Korea.
>> I have too many useful things in Korea.
And I know a lot of people.
>> correct!
If I leave in Korea, I should give up all things and people.
>> If I leave Korea, I should give up many things and people.
I don\'t like to choose that.
>> I don\'t like to do that.
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