the difference in happiness between adolescents and adults
학생이 쓴 원문
I think there is a slight difference. Adults should be responsible for themselves and have a wider range of activities than adolescents at the same time. However, adolescents are at an age when they learn to take responsibility for themselves, but they have less scope of activities. But I think adolescents are the right age to enjoy responsible pleasure. Because adults have so many things to think about.
강사 첨삭
I think there is a slight difference.
>> I think there is a slight difference between adults and adolescents.
Adults should be responsible for themselves and have a wider range of activities than adolescents at the same time.
>> Adults should be responsible for themselves and have a wider range of activities than adolescents.
However, adolescents are at an age when they learn to take responsibility for themselves, but they have less scope of activities.
>> On the other hand, adolescents are at an age when they are learning to take responsibility for themselves, but they have fewer activities and responsibilities.
But I think adolescents are the right age to enjoy responsible pleasure. Because adults have so many things to think about.
>> I believe adolescence is the right time to enjoy the pleasure of responsibility, because adults have so many things to worry about.
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