the effect of exercise

2010-09-01 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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as you know, exercise is good for our health. according to the study, when we exercise our brain releases chemical called endorphin. endorphin may make you feel happier. besides, when we laugh our body releases endorphin. and eating chocolate is the same thing. our body is made up of a combination of chemical and cell. and endorphin is a friendly material in body and it is a good component of them. we'd better try to exercise and laugh for our health.

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[이름], your composition is impressive. Not only that it is informative it is almost perfect. Thank you so much for the FYI. Keep passing composition to express the things the you weren't able to expound during the class. I really appreciate it. Have a great day!!! Lei J As you know, exercise is good for our health.>>correctAccording to the study, when we exercise our brain releases chemicals called endorphin.>>correctEndorphin may make you feel happier.>>correctBesides, when we laugh our body releases endorphin.>>correctand eating chocolate is the same thing.>>correctour body is made up of a combination of chemical and cell.>> our body is made up of cells and contains chemicalsand endorphin is a friendly material in body and it is a good component among all of them.>>correctwe'd better try to exercise and laugh for our health. >>correct

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