The essay about Trump

2016-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Today I would like to talk about Trump who is the presumptive nominee of the republican party for president of the United States in the 2016 election. First of all, I can not understand why Americans choose him as the nomenee of the US president in the 2016 election. He is famous for rough words. He always denounce his oppositions such as women, illegal immigration. Recently, Pope criticized him like this, The person who tries to built the wall but illegal immigration is not a christian. It because that he insisted that U.S has to build the wall. Trump also said that if South Korea should pay for all costs related to the U.S. troop presence in the country.South Korea already has paid for half cost related to the U.S troop for a long time.

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Hi, Mr. [Name]! ^^ Thank you very much for writing in our composition board today. I think Donald Trump is too radical with his ideas and most of them are impractical if not impossible. He does not understand the concept of co-existence. Although he is a good businessman, his experiences in the field of business are not entirely applicable when it comes to running a country. If he becomes the president of the United Stated states, many people will protest and the country he\'s trying to isolate from immigrants and Muslims will fall. He\'s a racist and he thrives on the poor and helpless. The U.S. will have more enemies than it already has and terrorists will take this opportunity to destroy the country he\'s so set to protect. The people who nominated him probably don\'t realize it yet; or maybe they do and they just don\'t care. Anyhow, I hope  you\'re having a great day. I\'ll see you again tomorrow. Take care and God bless. ~Teacher Charry (^_^) Today I would like to talk about Trump who is the presumptive nominee of the republican party for president of the United States in the 2016 election.>> CORRECT! OR >> Today I would like to talk about Trump who is the republican party\'s representative for the presidential elections in the United States in the 2016 election.First of all, I can not understand why Americans choose him as the nomenee of the US president in the 2016 election. >> First of all, I cannot understand why Americans chose him as a nominee for the US president in the 2016 election.He is famous for rough words. >> He is famous for his rough words. He always denounce his oppositions such as women, illegal immigration. >> He always denounces his oppositions such as women and illegal immigrants. Recently, Pope criticized him like this, The person who tries to built the wall but illegal immigration is not a christian. >> Recently, the Pope criticized him by saying that he is a person who tries to build a wall for illegal immigration but doing such is not a Christian action. It because that he insisted that U.S has to build the wall. >> It\'s because he insisted that the U.S has to build a wall. Trump also said that if South Korea should pay for all costs related to the U.S. troop presence in the country. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Trump also said that South Korea should pay for all of the military costs if we want the U.S. troops to stay in our country. South Korea already has paid for half cost related to the U.S troop for a long time. >> South Korea has already paid half of the cost a long time ago so the U.S. troop would stay in the country.

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