The experience which broke my heart.
학생이 쓴 원문
I have a experience which broke my heart.
It happend when I was in the military.
Every korean man has to enter the military.
and It takes about 2 years on average.
It differs depending on the kind of military.
By the way, I had a girl friend when I was in the military.
Our relationship went well.
But it was my thought.
One day, I got a phone call from her.
and She sounded different from usual days.
she said to me "I have something to tell you,
I am sorry , I have got a new boy friend.
and You know him."
At that time , I got really angry.
so I asked her "Who is he?"
She hesitated before replying.
but she told me that he was my superior in military.
I couldn't believe it.
They got to know each other because of me.
How did they fall in love?
강사 첨삭
Aww...This story breaks my heart [이름]. Anyway, I'm glad that you're a very tough person.
Stay strong.:)
Anyway, here are your corrections.
-Teacher JM-
I have a experience which broke my heart.
>>>I have an experience which broke my heart.
>>>I have an experience which broke my heart.
It happend when I was in the military.
>>>Correct!
Every korean man has to enter the military.
>>>Correct!
Every korean man has to enter the military.
>>>Correct!
and It takes about 2 years on average.
>>>It takes about 2 years on average to stay in the military.
>>>It takes about 2 years on average to stay in the military.
It differs depending on the kind of military.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
By the way, I had a girl friend when I was in the military.
>>>Correct!
Our relationship went well. But it was my thought.
>>>Our relationship went well...or so I thought.
One day, I got a phone call from her.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
and She sounded different from usual days.
>>>She sounded different from usual days.
>>>She sounded different from usual days.
she said to me "I have something to tell you,
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
I am sorry , I have got a new boy friend. and You know him."
>>>I am sorry , I have gotten a new boy friend. and You know him."
>>>I am sorry , I have gotten a new boy friend. and You know him."
At that time , I got really angry.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
so I asked her "Who is he?"
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
She hesitated before replying.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
but she told me that he was my superior in military.
>>>but she later told me that he was my superior in the military.
>>>but she later told me that he was my superior in the military.
I couldn't believe it.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
They got to know each other because of me.
>>>Correct!
>>>Correct!
How did they fall in love?
>>>Correct!
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