The firework I have seen
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It was the firework festival on Saturday night. It takes place every Fall at the beach in Busan. Luckily, I can enjoy it just out of the window in my house. They have many different kinds of shapes except for normal ones such as hearts, a Korean flag, planets, flowers, a smile face and letters. Besides, their colors were so vivid with blues, reds, greens, pinks and golds. It was amazing how is made the shapes and colors. The most thing was Niagara Falls under the Gwangan bridge and a beyond fantastic, grand and splendid finale above the sky.
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It was the firework festival on Saturday night. It takes place every
Fall at the beach in Busan. Luckily, I can enjoy it just out of the
window in my house. They have many different kinds of shapes except for
normal ones such as hearts, a Korean flag, planets, flowers, a smile
face and letters. Besides, their colors were so vivid with blues, reds,
greens, pinks and golds. It was amazing how is made the shapes and
colors. The most thing was Niagara Falls under the Gwangan bridge and a
beyond fantastic, grand and splendid finale above the sky.
>> It was the firework festival on Saturday night. It takes place every
Fall at the beach in Busan. Luckily, I can enjoy it just out of the
window in my house. They have many different kinds of shapes except for
normal ones such as hearts, a Korean flag, planets, flowers, a smiling face and letters. Besides, their colors were so vivid with blues, reds,
greens, pinks and golds. It was amazing how its made the shapes and
colors. The most thing was Niagara Falls under the Gwangan bridge and it was
beyond fantastic, grand and splendid finale above the sky.
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