The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made li
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The first step to the moon was unbelievable event and the epoch-making events of history. Nobody thought human could reach the universe and landed there. Many astronauts went to the moon and investigated it for mankind. I don\'t exactly know what they found on the moon but they have submitted the reports and something has been applied to the people\'s lives. We are encountered the environmental crisis. So many researchers and few business owners have tried to invest money to find the places where human can live in the future. One of the representative owner is Elon Musk, Teslsa, USA who established the company which do the research of spaces. We have seen a lot of animations and movies that showed us the technologies in the future and we can easily find the life on the universe. I am sure that it could be happen someday if we had serious problem such as flood, volcanic eruption and environmental issues on the earth. However, I want us to try to keep earth and live here.
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The first step to the moon was an unbelievable event and the epoch-making events of history.
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Nobody thought human could reach the universe and landed there.
>>> CORRECT
Many astronauts went to the moon and investigated it for mankind.
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I don\'t exactly know what they found on the moon but they have submitted the reports and something has been applied to the people\'s lives.
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We are encountered the environmental crisis.
>>> We encounter environmental crisis.
So many researchers and few business owners have tried to invest money to find the places where human can live in the future.
>>> CORRECT
One of the representative owner is Elon Musk, Teslsa, USA who established the company which do the research of spaces.
>>> CORRECT
We have seen a lot of animations and movies that showed us the technologies in the future and we can easily find the life on the universe.
>>> CORRECT
I am sure that it could be happen someday if we had serious problem such as flood, volcanic eruption and environmental issues on the earth.
>> I am sure that it could happen someday if we had serious problems such as flood, volcanic eruption and environmental issues on earth.
However, I want us to try to keep the earth and live here.
>>> CORRECT
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